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1NORANora opens a parcel addressed in her father's handwriting, twenty years after he left.
2NORAInside is his brass pocket watch, stopped, and an unused ferry ticket dated the day he left.
3NORAShe winds the watch and its second hand begins to run backward.
4NORAThe workshop around her has become her father's: his tools, his coat on the hook, an old calendar.
5NORA, FATHEROutside, her father, young again, is loading a suitcase into the boot of a car.
6NORA, FATHERNora lifts the suitcase back out of the boot and sets it down on the pavement.
7NORA, FATHER, GIRLHe brings the stranger inside, where a girl sits at breakfast: Nora is facing herself at nine.
8NORA, FATHERNora sets her stopped watch beside the identical one he takes from his pocket.
9NORA, GIRLFather has fled out the back door with his own watch, leaving Nora's alone on the table.
10GIRLThe car is gone, and the suitcase he left behind still stands on the pavement.
11NORANora opens the suitcase: his clock tools, and a one-way ticket for the six o'clock ferry.
12NORAHer fingertips on the suitcase handle have gone faintly transparent.
13NORA, GIRLThe girl rides with Nora toward the harbour, the suitcase between them and Nora's watch in her small fist.
14NORA, GIRL, FATHERAt the terminal they find him in the ticket queue.
15NORA, FATHERHe steps out of the queue and takes his suitcase from her hand.
16NORA, FATHERAcross a table he shows her why he is going: a debt demand with a red stamp.
17NORA, GIRLTo prove who she is, Nora lays her hand beside the girl's: the same scar across both thumbs.
18FATHER, GIRLFather tears his ferry ticket in half.
19NORANora's whole hand is now transparent against the tablecloth.
20FATHER, COLLECTORThe second man who stood by the car that morning comes in and sits at their table uninvited.
21COLLECTORHe lays a photograph of the girl beside the torn ticket.
22NORA, GIRLNora has taken the girl out of the café onto the pier, where the ferry is boarding.
23NORA, GIRLNora's arm has faded to the elbow; only the girl's grip shows where her hand is.
24NORA, GIRLNora has given the unused ferry ticket from the parcel to the girl, who now holds it.
25FATHER, GIRLThe girl, not Nora, puts the ticket into her father's hand as he comes out with his suitcase.
26FATHER, GIRLFather kneels and closes the girl's hand around his own pocket watch, so she holds both.
27FATHERFather walks up the gangway with his suitcase.
28COLLECTORThe collector hands over a ticket and follows him aboard, away from the girl.
29NORA, GIRLThe ferry has gone; the two of them stand alone at the end of the pier.
30NORA, GIRLNora's hand is solid again, holding the girl's, and between their palms the two watches run forward together.
scene 1 · medium
Nora opens a parcel addressed in her father's handwriting, twenty years after he left.
the picture turned out to be: A woman in a red coat is holding a brown bag. There is a brown table in front of her. There are clocks on the wall behind her.
looked at: clocks, brown bag, red coat
scene 2 · close
Inside is his brass pocket watch, stopped, and an unused ferry ticket dated the day he left.
the picture turned out to be: A person is wearing a red jacket. They are holding a brown box. There is a clock on the box.
looked at: box, jacket, clock
scene 3 · close
She winds the watch and its second hand begins to run backward.
the picture turned out to be: A person is holding a watch in their left hand. The face of the watch is white. There are roman numerals on the face. The person is wearing a red jacket. There is a woman standing behind the person holding a black bag. Behind the woman there are four clocks. The hands of the clock are black. The bac
looked at: roman numerals, jacket, face
scene 4 · medium
The workshop around her has become her father's: his tools, his coat on the hook, an old calendar.
the picture turned out to be: A woman is standing in a room. She is wearing a long red coat. She has black gloves on her hands. There is a black coat hanging on a rack next to the woman.
looked at: room, woman, coat, black coat
revision 1 — after scene 4:
20 kept, 6 rewritten,
ending moved 0.263
from looking at: 1 image ago: room, woman, coat, black coat
2 images ago: roman numerals, jacket, face
3 images ago: box, jacket, clock
4 images ago: clocks, brown bag, red coat
totals: jacket x2, clocks x1, brown bag x1, red coat x1, box x1
scene 26moved 0.59
was: Father kneels and gives the girl the key to his workshop.
Father kneels, buttons his black coat shut around the girl and drops his workshop key into its pocket.
scene 9moved 0.48
was: Father has fled out the back door; his chair is empty and the door stands open.
Father has fled out the back door and left his black coat on its hook.
scene 13moved 0.44
was: Nora and the girl ride toward the harbour with the suitcase between them.
The girl, wrapped in his too-big black coat, rides with Nora toward the harbour, the suitcase between them.
scene 30moved 0.26
was: Nora's hand, holding the girl's, is solid again, the workshop key pressed between their palms.
Nora's hand is solid again, holding the girl's, the workshop key from his coat pocket pressed between their palms.
the whole story from here, as it stood after this revision — 26 scenes
5. Outside, her father, young again, is loading a suitcase into the boot of a car.
6. Nora lifts the suitcase back out of the boot and sets it down on the pavement.
7. He brings the stranger inside, where a girl sits at breakfast: Nora is facing herself at nine.
8. Nora sets her stopped watch beside the identical one he takes from his pocket.
9. Father has fled out the back door and left his black coat on its hook.
10. The car is gone, and the suitcase he left behind still stands on the pavement.
11. Nora opens the suitcase: his clock tools, and a one-way ticket for the six o'clock ferry.
12. Her fingertips on the suitcase handle have gone faintly transparent.
13. The girl, wrapped in his too-big black coat, rides with Nora toward the harbour, the suitcase between them.
14. At the terminal they find him in the ticket queue.
15. He steps out of the queue and takes his suitcase from her hand.
16. Across a table he shows her why he is going: a debt demand with a red stamp.
17. To prove who she is, Nora lays her hand beside the girl's: the same scar across both thumbs.
18. Father tears his ferry ticket in half.
19. Nora's whole hand is now transparent against the tablecloth.
20. A man in a burgundy leather coat comes in and sits at their table uninvited.
21. He lays a photograph of the girl beside the torn ticket.
22. Nora has taken the girl out of the café onto the pier, where the ferry is boarding.
23. Nora's arm has faded to the elbow; only the girl's grip shows where her hand is.
24. Father comes out onto the pier with his suitcase, the collector a step behind him.
25. Nora presses the unused ticket from the parcel into his palm.
26. Father kneels, buttons his black coat shut around the girl and drops his workshop key into its pocket.
27. Father walks up the gangway with his suitcase.
28. The collector hands over a ticket and follows him aboard, away from the girl.
29. The ferry has gone; the two of them stand alone at the end of the pier.
30. Nora's hand is solid again, holding the girl's, the workshop key from his coat pocket pressed between their palms.
scene 5 · medium
Outside, her father, young again, is loading a suitcase into the boot of a car.
the picture turned out to be: There are two men standing next to a car. The man on the left is holding a brown suitcase. There is a woman standing behind the men. There are buildings behind the people.
looked at: buildings, people, brown suitcase
scene 6 · medium
Nora lifts the suitcase back out of the boot and sets it down on the pavement.
the picture turned out to be: A man and woman are standing next to a car. The woman is wearing a red coat. There are suitcases in front of the woman.
looked at: red coat, man
scene 7 · medium
He brings the stranger inside, where a girl sits at breakfast: Nora is facing herself at nine.
the picture turned out to be: Three people are standing in a kitchen. There is a woman in a red coat standing behind a girl. The girl is wearing a yellow hat and a yellow sweater.
looked at: yellow hat, yellow sweater, girl, three people
scene 8 · close
Nora sets her stopped watch beside the identical one he takes from his pocket.
the picture turned out to be: A man and a woman are sitting at a table. They are both wearing watches. The man is wearing a blue shirt and has a beard. The woman is wearing red and has short black hair. There are two watches on the table in front of them. There is a counter behind them with knobs on it.
looked at: watches, beard, table
revision 2 — after scene 8:
15 kept, 7 rewritten,
ending moved 0.366
from looking at: 1 image ago: watches, beard, table
2 images ago: yellow hat, yellow sweater, girl, three people
3 images ago: red coat, man
4 images ago: buildings, people, brown suitcase
totals: buildings x1, people x1, brown suitcase x1, red coat x1, man x1
looked at earlier, not once in this batch: black coat, box, brown bag, clock, clocks
scene 26moved 0.66
was: Father kneels, buttons his black coat shut around the girl and drops his workshop key into its pocket.
Father kneels and closes the girl's hand around his own pocket watch, so she holds both.
scene 9moved 0.46
was: Father has fled out the back door and left his black coat on its hook.
Father has fled out the back door with his own watch, leaving Nora's alone on the table.
scene 20moved 0.46
was: A man in a burgundy leather coat comes in and sits at their table uninvited.
The second man who stood by the car that morning comes in and sits at their table uninvited.
scene 13moved 0.39
was: The girl, wrapped in his too-big black coat, rides with Nora toward the harbour, the suitcase between them.
The girl rides with Nora toward the harbour, the suitcase between them and Nora's watch in her small fist.
scene 30moved 0.37
was: Nora's hand is solid again, holding the girl's, the workshop key from his coat pocket pressed between their palms.
Nora's hand is solid again, holding the girl's, and between their palms the two watches run forward together.
the whole story from here, as it stood after this revision — 22 scenes
9. Father has fled out the back door with his own watch, leaving Nora's alone on the table.
10. The car is gone, and the suitcase he left behind still stands on the pavement.
11. Nora opens the suitcase: his clock tools, and a one-way ticket for the six o'clock ferry.
12. Her fingertips on the suitcase handle have gone faintly transparent.
13. The girl rides with Nora toward the harbour, the suitcase between them and Nora's watch in her small fist.
14. At the terminal they find him in the ticket queue.
15. He steps out of the queue and takes his suitcase from her hand.
16. Across a table he shows her why he is going: a debt demand with a red stamp.
17. To prove who she is, Nora lays her hand beside the girl's: the same scar across both thumbs.
18. Father tears his ferry ticket in half.
19. Nora's whole hand is now transparent against the tablecloth.
20. The second man who stood by the car that morning comes in and sits at their table uninvited.
21. He lays a photograph of the girl beside the torn ticket.
22. Nora has taken the girl out of the café onto the pier, where the ferry is boarding.
23. Nora's arm has faded to the elbow; only the girl's grip shows where her hand is.
24. Father comes out onto the pier with his suitcase, the collector a step behind him.
25. Nora presses the unused ticket from the parcel into his palm.
26. Father kneels and closes the girl's hand around his own pocket watch, so she holds both.
27. Father walks up the gangway with his suitcase.
28. The collector hands over a ticket and follows him aboard, away from the girl.
29. The ferry has gone; the two of them stand alone at the end of the pier.
30. Nora's hand is solid again, holding the girl's, and between their palms the two watches run forward together.
scene 9 · medium
Father has fled out the back door with his own watch, leaving Nora's alone on the table.
the picture turned out to be: A woman in a red coat is standing in front of a window. There is a child sitting in a chair wearing a yellow hat. There are two chairs in the room next to the woman.
looked at: red coat, chairs
scene 10 · wide
The car is gone, and the suitcase he left behind still stands on the pavement.
the picture turned out to be: A man is standing on the sidewalk. He is wearing a yellow hat on his head. There is a brown suitcase next to the man. There are buildings on both sides of the street.
looked at: buildings, girl, street, hat
scene 11 · close
Nora opens the suitcase: his clock tools, and a one-way ticket for the six o'clock ferry.
the picture turned out to be: A person wearing a red jacket and black pants is standing next to a brown suitcase. The person is holding a white card in their hand. The suitcase is open and has a lot of stuff inside of it.
looked at: lot stuff inside, white card, person, their hand
scene 12 · close
Her fingertips on the suitcase handle have gone faintly transparent.
the picture turned out to be: A person is holding a black bag. The person is wearing a red jacket. There is a brick floor behind the person.
looked at: person, jacket
never shown — the story from here when it stopped
13. The girl rides with Nora toward the harbour, the suitcase between them and Nora's watch in her small fist.
14. At the terminal they find him in the ticket queue.
15. He steps out of the queue and takes his suitcase from her hand.
16. Across a table he shows her why he is going: a debt demand with a red stamp.
17. To prove who she is, Nora lays her hand beside the girl's: the same scar across both thumbs.
18. Father tears his ferry ticket in half.
19. Nora's whole hand is now transparent against the tablecloth.
20. The second man who stood by the car that morning comes in and sits at their table uninvited.
21. He lays a photograph of the girl beside the torn ticket.
22. Nora has taken the girl out of the café onto the pier, where the ferry is boarding.
23. Nora's arm has faded to the elbow; only the girl's grip shows where her hand is.
24. Nora has given the unused ferry ticket from the parcel to the girl, who now holds it.
25. The girl, not Nora, puts the ticket into her father's hand as he comes out with his suitcase.
26. Father kneels and closes the girl's hand around his own pocket watch, so she holds both.
27. Father walks up the gangway with his suitcase.
28. The collector hands over a ticket and follows him aboard, away from the girl.
29. The ferry has gone; the two of them stand alone at the end of the pier.
30. Nora's hand is solid again, holding the girl's, and between their palms the two watches run forward together.
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