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Two people who have known each other a long time are at the edge of a cold lake at dusk. One of them is leaving in the morning. Neither has said so out loud.
the whole script — all 30 scenes, as it finally stood (19 played)
1They arrive at the water's edge together, a packed suitcase left visible in the car behind them.
2He drags an old wooden rowboat out of the reeds.
3Inside the hull, she uncovers two sets of initials carved long ago, hers beside his.
4She steps down into the boat and sits in the stern.
5He rows them out, away from the shore.
6A folded bus ticket slips from her coat pocket into the water in the bottom of the boat.
7His hand lifts the wet ticket out of the bilge.
8He unfolds it: one passenger, tomorrow, 7:10 a.m.
9He pulls the oars in and lets the boat drift, the ticket still in his hand.
10They have drifted far out toward a dark island, where a second, brown boat lies on the shore.
11He hands the ticket back to her.
12She pockets the ticket, and he rows for the island instead of home.
13They haul their boat up beside the old brown wooden rowboat rotting on the stones.
14He gets a fire burning in a stone ring they built as children.
15Under one of the stones she finds a rusted tin buried long ago.
16She opens it: two brass whistles on faded strings.
17She presses one of the two gold earrings into his palm and closes his fingers over it.
18She falls asleep against his shoulder under his jacket, wearing the other earring.
19He walks down to the water and finds the boat gone, only a scrape mark in the stones.
20He wades in to his knees after it and stops, the boat already too far out to reach.
21He comes back and sits down beside her without waking her.
22She wakes, goes down to the water and finds the boat gone.
23She takes the ticket out and puts it in his hand.
24He drags the old brown wooden boat down off the stones into the water.
25He climbs into the leaking wooden boat and pushes off.
26He is far out in the old boat, reaching for the drifting green one, and she is alone on the shore.
27He rows the green boat back in, soaked and shaking, the old one sunk behind him.
28Back at the dock, she has wrapped him in her green coat.
29The bus has come; she stands at its open door with her suitcase.
30The bus pulls away without her, and she is standing beside him with her suitcase as he fastens the other earring to his coat.
scene 1 · medium
They arrive at the water's edge together, a packed suitcase left visible in the car behind them.
the picture turned out to be: A man and a woman are standing next to a car. The car is parked in front of a body of water. There is a brown suitcase on the back of the car.
looked at: b
scene 2 · medium
He drags an old wooden rowboat out of the reeds.
the picture turned out to be: There are people standing around a small boat. The boat is green and silver. There is tall weeds around the boat. There are trees in the distance.
looked at: t, b, p
scene 3 · close
Inside the hull, she uncovers two sets of initials carved long ago, hers beside his.
the picture turned out to be: A person is wearing black gloves. They are standing next to a metal rail. There are leaves on the ground next to the rail.
looked at: l, g, p
scene 4 · medium
She steps down into the boat and sits in the stern.
the picture turned out to be: There are two people in a boat. There is a woman in a green coat sitting on the boat. The man is standing next to her wearing a brown jacket.
looked at: b, w, g, b
revision 1 — after scene 4:
13 kept, 13 rewritten,
ending moved
from looking at: 1 image ago: b, w, g, b
2 images ago: l, g, p
3 images ago: t, b, p
4 images ago: b
totals: b x4, p x2, g x2, t x1, l x1
scene 19moved 0.06
scene 5 · medium
He rows them out, away from the shore.
the picture turned out to be: A man and a woman are sitting in a green boat. The woman is wearing a green coat and holding a lantern. The man is also wearing a brown jacket and black pants. The water behind them is calm and blue. There are trees on the other side of the water.
looked at: w, t, j, l
scene 6 · close
A folded bus ticket slips from her coat pocket into the water in the bottom of the boat.
the picture turned out to be: A person is standing on a set of stairs. The stairs are green. The person is wearing black boots. There is a white object on the ground in front of the person.
looked at: w, p, b
scene 7 · close
His hand lifts the wet ticket out of the bilge.
the picture turned out to be: A person's hand is holding an object. The object looks like a device. The person is wearing a long sleeve brown shirt. There is a light on the top of the object. There are two boats on the water. The water is calm. The surface of the water is green. The boat on the right is dark brown. The light is
looked at: o, h, l
scene 8 · close
He unfolds it: one passenger, tomorrow, 7:10 a.m.
the picture turned out to be: A man is wearing a green jacket. He is holding a white paper in his hands. There is writing on the paper.
looked at: h, p
revision 2 — after scene 8:
15 kept, 7 rewritten,
ending moved
from looking at: 1 image ago: h, p
2 images ago: o, h, l
3 images ago: w, p, b
4 images ago: w, t, j, l
totals: w x2, l x2, p x2, h x2, t x1
looked at earlier, not once in this batch: g
scene 24moved 0.70
scene 25moved 0.68
scene 13moved 0.61
scene 10moved 0.52
scene 26moved 0.30
scene 27moved 0.28
scene 9moved 0.23
scene 9 · medium
He pulls the oars in and lets the boat drift, the ticket still in his hand.
the picture turned out to be: Two men are sitting in a blue boat on the water. The man on the left is wearing a brown jacket and holding a wooden oar in his hands. He is looking to the right. The other man is looking off to the side. The water is calm and blue. There are trees on the other side of the body of water. It is a sunn
looked at: t, b, w, m
scene 10 · wide
They have drifted far out toward a dark island, where a second, brown boat lies on the shore.
the picture turned out to be: A man is sitting in a green canoe on the water. The man is holding two oars in his hands. There is a small tree on the shore behind the man.
looked at: s, m, g, s
scene 11 · medium
He hands the ticket back to her.
the picture turned out to be: There are two people standing on a boat. There is water behind them. There are two lights on the boat. The man on the left is wearing a brown jacket.
looked at: l, j, m
scene 12 · medium
She pockets the ticket, and he rows for the island instead of home.
the picture turned out to be: A man and a woman are standing on a green boat. The man is wearing a brown jacket and holding a paddle in his hands. The woman is standing next to the boat wearing a green jacket and black boots. The water is calm and still. There are many trees in the background. The sky above the trees is gray.
looked at: p, b, w
revision 3 — after scene 12:
17 kept, 1 rewritten,
ending moved
from looking at: 1 image ago: p, b, w
2 images ago: l, j, m
3 images ago: s, m, g, s
4 images ago: t, b, w, m
totals: m x3, b x2, w x2, s x2, t x1
looked at earlier, not once in this batch: h, o
scene 20moved 0.79
scene 13 · medium
They haul their boat up beside the old brown wooden rowboat rotting on the stones.
the picture turned out to be: Two men are standing on a rocky beach. One of the men is wearing a brown jacket, blue jeans and brown shoes. He is holding a green oar in his hands. The other man is standing next to a small boat. The boat is green and brown in color. There is a light pole on the beach next to the boat.
looked at: g, o, o, l
scene 14 · medium
He gets a fire burning in a stone ring they built as children.
the picture turned out to be: A man and a woman are sitting on the ground in front of a fire. The woman is wearing a green jacket. The man is wearing brown jacket and black pants.
looked at: p
scene 15 · close
Under one of the stones she finds a rusted tin buried long ago.
the picture turned out to be: A person is wearing black gloves. They are putting something on top of a small block. There is a large rock to the left of the person.
looked at: l, s, g
scene 16 · close
She opens it: two brass whistles on faded strings.
the picture turned out to be: A person is holding a small black box. The person is wearing a black jacket. There are two gold earrings in the box.
looked at: g
revision 4 — after scene 16:
10 kept, 4 rewritten,
ending moved 0.231
from looking at: 1 image ago: g
2 images ago: l, s, g
3 images ago: p
4 images ago: g, o, o, l
totals: g x3, o x2, l x2, p x1, s x1
looked at earlier, not once in this batch: b, h, j, m, t
scene 17moved 0.73
scene 30moved 0.23
scene 18moved 0.18
scene 17 · close
She presses one of the two gold earrings into his palm and closes his fingers over it.
the picture turned out to be: A man and woman are standing next to each other. They are both wearing medals around their necks. The woman is wearing a green coat with a scarf around her neck. There is water behind them.
looked at: m, w, s
scene 18 · medium
She falls asleep against his shoulder under his jacket, wearing the other earring.
the picture turned out to be: A man and a woman are sitting together. The woman is wearing a green coat. The man has a brown coat on. They are sitting in front of a field of grass.
looked at: g, w, m, c
scene 19 · medium
He walks down to the water and finds the boat gone, only a scrape mark in the stones.
the picture turned out to be: There are two men standing on a rock. There is a small boat in the water. The water is calm and blue. The sky above the water is gray.
looked at: s, m, s, r
never shown — the story from here when it stopped
20. He wades in to his knees after it and stops, the boat already too far out to reach.
21. He comes back and sits down beside her without waking her.
22. She wakes, goes down to the water and finds the boat gone.
23. She takes the ticket out and puts it in his hand.
24. He drags the old brown wooden boat down off the stones into the water.
25. He climbs into the leaking wooden boat and pushes off.
26. He is far out in the old boat, reaching for the drifting green one, and she is alone on the shore.
27. He rows the green boat back in, soaked and shaking, the old one sunk behind him.
28. Back at the dock, she has wrapped him in her green coat.
29. The bus has come; she stands at its open door with her suitcase.
30. The bus pulls away without her, and she is standing beside him with her suitcase as he fastens the other earring to his coat.
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