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Two people who have known each other a long time are at the edge of a cold lake at dusk. One of them is leaving in the morning. Neither has said so out loud.
the whole script — all 30 scenes, as it finally stood (6 played)
1Together they carry the old wooden rowboat down to the water's edge.
2They push off, and he takes the oars.
3They swap seats, and now she rows.
4A folded bus ticket slides out of his jacket pocket into the water in the bottom of the boat.
5Her hand closes over the wet ticket.
6She slips the ticket into her own pocket while his back is to her.
7They land the boat on the small rocky island in the middle of the lake.
8He builds a driftwood fire, and they sit on the rocks beside it.
9He turns his pockets inside out: the ticket is gone.
10He searches the boat with a flashlight while she stays at the fire.
11She kicks sand over the fire, which means it is time to go.
12He rows them back hard through the dark.
13He searches his pickup truck's cab under the dome light while she watches from the dock.
14She takes down the boat logbook they write in after every row and sets it on the table.
15She tucks the ticket between the pages of the logbook.
16He opens the logbook to write the night's entry, and the ticket falls out onto the table.
17The ticket lies on the table between their two hands.
18He writes the entry, closes the book on the ticket, and pushes it across the table to her.
19He has gone to lie down on the couch, and she is alone at the table with the book.
20She opens the woodstove door, holding the ticket.
21She shuts the stove, wraps herself in a blanket and goes out into the dark with the ticket.
22She sits alone at the end of the dock, holding the ticket out over the water.
23He comes down and sits beside her.
24She lays the ticket on the planks between them.
25He stands and walks back up toward the cabin, leaving the ticket where it lies.
26He heaves his duffel into the truck bed.
27She picks the ticket up off the frosted planks.
28He sits in the truck with the engine running as she walks up to the driver's window.
29She holds the ticket out through the window, and his hands stay on the wheel.
30He is gone, and she rows out alone and lets the ticket go onto the water.
scene 1 · medium
Together they carry the old wooden rowboat down to the water's edge.
the picture turned out to be: There are two people standing in front of a body of water. There is a man in a brown jacket and a white hat on the other person. The person in the red jacket is holding a brown boat.
looked at: b, p
scene 2 · medium
They push off, and he takes the oars.
the picture turned out to be: A man and woman are sitting on a boat in the water. The man is wearing a brown jacket and black pants. He has a black glove on his left hand. The woman has a red jacket on with a gray scarf on her head. The water is calm and blue. There are trees on the other side of the body of water.
looked at: r
scene 3 · medium
They swap seats, and now she rows.
the picture turned out to be: A man and a woman are sitting in a boat. The woman is wearing a red jacket and a gray hat. The man is also wearing a brown jacket. They are holding oars in their hands. The water is calm and blue. There are trees on the other side of the water. The sky above the water is gray.
looked at: o
scene 4 · close
A folded bus ticket slides out of his jacket pocket into the water in the bottom of the boat.
the picture turned out to be: There is a small sticker on the ground. The sticker has a picture of a car on it. There is a person sitting in a chair next to the person. The chair is brown. The person is wearing brown pants. There are wooden legs on the chair. The ground under the chair is covered in water. The water is splashing
looked at: w
revision 1 — after scene 4:
22 kept, 4 rewritten,
ending moved 0.407
from looking at: 1 image ago: w
2 images ago: o
3 images ago: r
4 images ago: b, p
totals: b x1, p x1, r x1, o x1, w x1
scene 30moved 0.41
scene 22moved 0.28
scene 5 · close
Her hand closes over the wet ticket.
the picture turned out to be: A person's hand is holding an object. The object looks like a tube with a picture of a car on it. The person is wearing a red sweater. There is water next to the person. There are wooden railings next to water.
looked at: s
scene 6 · medium
She slips the ticket into her own pocket while his back is to her.
the picture turned out to be: A woman in a red jacket and a gray hat is standing on a boat. There is a man in a brown jacket standing next to her. There are trees behind the water.
looked at: b, m, b, t
never shown — the story from here when it stopped
7. They land the boat on the small rocky island in the middle of the lake.
8. He builds a driftwood fire, and they sit on the rocks beside it.
9. He turns his pockets inside out: the ticket is gone.
10. He searches the boat with a flashlight while she stays at the fire.
11. She kicks sand over the fire, which means it is time to go.
12. He rows them back hard through the dark.
13. He searches his pickup truck's cab under the dome light while she watches from the dock.
14. She takes down the boat logbook they write in after every row and sets it on the table.
15. She tucks the ticket between the pages of the logbook.
16. He opens the logbook to write the night's entry, and the ticket falls out onto the table.
17. The ticket lies on the table between their two hands.
18. He writes the entry, closes the book on the ticket, and pushes it across the table to her.
19. He has gone to lie down on the couch, and she is alone at the table with the book.
20. She opens the woodstove door, holding the ticket.
21. She shuts the stove, wraps herself in a blanket and goes out into the dark with the ticket.
22. She sits alone at the end of the dock, holding the ticket out over the water.
23. He comes down and sits beside her.
24. She lays the ticket on the planks between them.
25. He stands and walks back up toward the cabin, leaving the ticket where it lies.
26. He heaves his duffel into the truck bed.
27. She picks the ticket up off the frosted planks.
28. He sits in the truck with the engine running as she walks up to the driver's window.
29. She holds the ticket out through the window, and his hands stay on the wheel.
30. He is gone, and she rows out alone and lets the ticket go onto the water.
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